The USSR had great success in many areas
The PRC struggled during the Great Leap Forward
You seem to be papering over the part where a shit ton of their own people died, so I don’t think this really works as a pitch. You’d need to find a way to ensure that mass death wouldn’t happen again, and then succinctly express it.
Mao was only about 70% good
Anyone who does mass executions is a fucking monster. Probably better to leave this out of the pitch.
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